How well would this rakeback landing page convert?

[Squizzel]

Full Tilt Poker Rakeback - 27% Rakeback - $600 bonus

just something i have been playing with, took me the best part of a few hours today so please be somewhat kind!

The one major concernt is i think there might be too much text in the first block, its only a few hundred words but i dont want to put someone off with a big block of text when they first see the page.

Also thoughts on the writing, copywriting, calls to action, how well you will think it will convert?

Im aware there are several spelling and grammar mistakes, they will of course get fixed sometime soon.

Thanks again everyone,

[Unknown Webmaster]

Personally I don't like that is says that the rake races etc. are exclusive to holdemhub.com players, when it is shared with all RakeUpdate players. I say that "we at holdemhub.com value our players, so in addition to your rakeback, we give you access to exclusive rake races and freerolls.

It is just semantics, but I could really see myself nitpicking about something like that if I had signed up through you.

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I'm not sure if it is a good idea to mention other rakeback providers 2 times in the first 3 paragraphs.

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Generally speaking I like it though.

[Squizzel]

yeah, i will change the "exclusive" thing since its not technically true.

[sirtiner]

it's all good

[sirtiner]

never mind, it was your own forum

[GregW]

Add onClick="this.value=''" in to the <input> tag for the fields where visitors have to enter their email and username. Like this:

<input name='signupname' type='text' class="form" id='signupname' onClick="this.value=''" value='Enter your email address here!'/>

This will make the forms go blank when the user clicks on them rather than having them delete the "Enter your email address here!" text first before entering their information.

I also don't think that you should have another sign up steps box at the bottom. I understand the idea of reminding the visitors that scroll to the bottom how to sign up, but I think that a few may find it confusing. Some visitors may not know which box to enter their information in to (even though we know that it does not matter, some may not know this).

One more important thing... you need to set a theme for your hyperlinks and stick to it. Right now you have bold text only for the "click here" link and I also found that other links in the top right corner had no style to them, they just look like normal text. If you're not careful your site isn't going to be much fun for your visitors to use if they can't easily see where the links are. Definitely underline them and maybe even change their colour.


EDIT: One more thing, I didn't know that the "Signup here!" button was clickable because my mouse cursor doesn't change like it would with a normal link when I hover over it. You can rectify this by adding this line of code to your css:

.cool-button:hover {cursor: pointer;}

[Squizzel]

Add onClick="this.value=''" in to the <input> tag for the fields where visitors have to enter their email and username. Like this:

<input name='signupname' type='text' class="form" id='signupname' onClick="this.value=''" value='Enter your email address here!'/>

This will make the forms go blank when the user clicks on them rather than having them delete the "Enter your email address here!" text first before entering their information.

I also don't think that you should have another sign up steps box at the bottom. I understand the idea of reminding the visitors that scroll to the bottom how to sign up, but I think that a few may find it confusing. Some visitors may not know which box to enter their information in to (even though we know that it does not matter, some may not know this).

One more important thing... you need to set a theme for your hyperlinks and stick to it. Right now you have bold text only for the "click here" link and I also found that other links in the top right corner had no style to them, they just look like normal text. If you're not careful your site isn't going to be much fun for your visitors to use if they can't easily see where the links are. Definitely underline them and maybe even change their colour.


EDIT: One more thing, I didn't know that the "Signup here!" button was clickable because my mouse cursor doesn't change like it would with a normal link when I hover over it. You can rectify this by adding this line of code to your css:

.cool-button:hover {cursor: pointer;}

Thank you gonna change now. All very helpful points. I updated it.

[imteaz]

Great design, loved it. good luck

[ultra100]

Nice layout and text is written in great order. Introduction with key-points, steps and finally full-review. Looks very good.

[Randy Ray]

If I wanted to sign up for rakeback on this page, the first thing I would try to click on would be the Full Tilt Poker logo on the top left of the content.